Critique this scene please?

You definitely did very well on creating the scene and the way you formulated the characters on precisely right. The only thing I found in your work was your use on "whom". Its correct but it makes your writing a little obnoxious and pedantic. Just stick to who. Also, the entire first sentence is a run on sentence. I either think you should cut it in two and rephrase some of it or consolidate the message you are trying to give in the first sentence. Other than that i loved it. It was a nice little scene and i loved the way you described everything. The use of imagery was very nice.